From 514176c231f71886a1a4be48a7a7a4fb43433e74 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Scott Rifenbark <scott.m.rifenbark@intel.com>
Date: Mon, 22 Apr 2013 14:23:29 -0700
Subject: dev-manual, ref-manual: Minor edits suggested by Bill Traynor

Applied some re-wordings as suggested by Bill Traynor.

Reported-by: William M.A. Traynor <wmat@alphatroop.com>
(From yocto-docs rev: 2510d9795720afc0309a10b18605e5af4a83769b)

Signed-off-by: Scott Rifenbark <scott.m.rifenbark@intel.com>
Signed-off-by: Richard Purdie <richard.purdie@linuxfoundation.org>
---
 documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml | 13 +++++++------
 1 file changed, 7 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-)

(limited to 'documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml')

diff --git a/documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml b/documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml
index b0d6386fea..ed1ab07fb1 100644
--- a/documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml
+++ b/documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml
@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@
                 <listitem><para>Step-by-step instructions if those instructions exist in other Yocto
                     Project documentation.
                     For example, the Yocto Project Application Developer's Guide contains detailed
-                    instruction on how to run the
+                    instructions on how to run the
                     <ulink url='&YOCTO_DOCS_ADT_URL;#installing-the-adt'>Installing the ADT and Toolchains</ulink>,
                     which is used to set up a cross-development environment.</para></listitem>
                 <listitem><para>Reference material.
@@ -96,8 +96,9 @@
         <title>Other Information</title>
 
         <para>
-            Because this manual presents overview information for many different topics, you will
-            need to supplement it with other information.
+            Because this manual presents overview information for many different 
+            topics, supplemental information is recommended for full
+            comprehension.
             The following list presents other sources of information you might find helpful:
             <itemizedlist>
                 <listitem><para><emphasis><ulink url='&YOCTO_HOME_URL;'>Yocto Project Website</ulink>:
@@ -105,7 +106,7 @@
                     as well as links to software and documentation.</para></listitem>
                 <listitem><para><emphasis>
                     <ulink url='&YOCTO_DOCS_QS_URL;'>Yocto Project Quick Start</ulink>:</emphasis> This short document lets you get started
-                    with the Yocto Project quickly and start building an image.</para></listitem>
+                    with the Yocto Project and quickly begin building an image.</para></listitem>
                 <listitem><para><emphasis>
                     <ulink url='&YOCTO_DOCS_REF_URL;'>Yocto Project Reference Manual</ulink>:</emphasis> This manual is a reference
                     guide to the OpenEmbedded build system known as "Poky."
@@ -169,7 +170,7 @@
                             OpenEmbedded build system (Poky).
                             </para></listitem>
                         <listitem><para><ulink url='&YOCTO_LISTS_URL;/listinfo/yocto-announce'></ulink>
-                            for a mailing list to receive official Yocto Project announcements for developments and
+                            for a mailing list to receive official Yocto Project announcements
                             as well as Yocto Project milestones.</para></listitem>
                         <listitem><para><ulink url='&YOCTO_LISTS_URL;/listinfo'></ulink> for a
                             listing of all public mailing lists on <filename>lists.yoctoproject.org</filename>.
@@ -182,7 +183,7 @@
                 <listitem><para><emphasis>
                     <ulink url='&OE_HOME_URL;'>OpenEmbedded</ulink>:</emphasis>
                     The build system used by the Yocto Project.
-                    This project is the upstream, generic, embedded distribution from which the Yocto
+                    This project is the upstream, generic, embedded distribution that the Yocto
                     Project derives its build system (Poky) from and to which it contributes.</para></listitem>
                 <listitem><para><emphasis>
                     <ulink url='http://developer.berlios.de/projects/bitbake/'>
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